And thank you -- much better dialogue!

The real problem is that Vala says and does nothing. Which is totally out of character for her. Because even when she's hurting, she still does something. I mean, in "Beachhead" when Daniel kept telling her to shut up she went off and did her own damn thing! She's an Action Woman!

Also, I'm glad you enjoyed my rewrite. ;)

It does require some wankery that they've made it appear that Daniel has been in love with Vala for a while, but then I firmly believe you can be in love with more than one person at a time.

As I said elsewhere, after "Beachhead" I thought that Daniel might be starting to love her, but then everything that came after made it seem more friendly. "Memento Mori" (which I thought would solidify the D/V ship) seemed much more teamly than shippy. And her comments in "Bounty" really put the kabosh on it because Vala expressed loyatly to Tomin. They seemed to veer away from Daniel/Vala and then suddenly it was WHAMO.

Of course, no where near as aggravating as Jack/Sam to me. Because aside from the one bit of silent crying, I never felt like Vala was completely stripped of her character. (I mean the sitting in Daniel's lap at Christmas? We know who instiagated that.)

And the Chulak story is, of course, a much better show ender. *sigh*

Thank you. I might maybe write it. I'm certainly interested it in. That and Langara. I want to see rebellions against the Ori on those planets!